Monday, April 11, 2011

Lightening

The vibrant neon strip of burning electricity lightens the sky during a big storm. The cold teardrops from the fluffy black clouds pitter- patter on my roof. Loud booms of thunder followed by the crack of lightning sends a cold chill down my spine. What really makes lightning burst its way through the sky? This question still remains unanswered in my mind.  By Jasmine
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3 comments:

  1. TiffanyApril 11, 2011 at 10:25 AM

    Wow, great job Jasmine you should post more of your writing.

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  2. UnknownApril 11, 2011 at 1:10 PM

    great use of adjectives paint some vivid pictures. sciencelabman .bedford.Uk

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  3. Christina HApril 11, 2011 at 9:59 PM

    First of all I would like to point out your use of neon yellow text just like lightning in the sky!!!! Great Job! Reading your piece puts me right in the middle of a storm. I love your use of adjectives from the pitter patter of rain on the roof to the loud boom the thunder makes. I too have felt that cold shiver down my spine from a crack of lighting. Excellent job!!! :0)

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